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Mar. 14th, 2014 11:56 am
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Page 1
- Maybe just Aaah instead of Aa-ah?
- "Let's split into two groups and run."

Page 6
- "It seems your physical ability doesn't amount to much" might work better.

Page 11
- "She takes another's form" -- instead of anothers.

Page 12
- "So, what am I supposed to do..."
- "Give him the finishing blow, then, Lily."

Page 16
- "How long do you intend to sit on top of a girl!?" no For!
- "Hah, who's a woman? You're just a tanuki who's taken that form."
- "I know this guy who refuses to kill."

Page 17
- "Ohh... I see now."

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